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Hong Kong

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Steph had her back to him, as if to block Geoff out entirely.

He wished he hadn't said anything; he should've kept on talking about the weather, instead of admitting he had taken the offer.

The painful sob that escaped her broke the silence in the room.

Geoff reached for her shoulder.

"Leave me alone," she said, refusing to turn around.

"Listen to me."

It was ironic how the darkest moment of his life was taking place in the brightest room in his house.

"I had to take the job. We need the money." Geoff tried to reason with her. "You have to trust me."

"Don't you dare tell me what we need. We don't exist." Her words cut through him.

He had to look at the hard wood floor to keep himself strong enough to handle the rest of the conversation.

They'd saved up for months to be able to afford that floor - it was so smooth that they could roll coins on it.

Somehow, her quarters always passed the finish line before his.

How phony would Holden call me right now?

100%.

And, he'd have to sell all of their hard-earned furniture before he moved, removing all trace of them ever living here.

"Can't you tell them that you changed your mind?" Steph was grasping at straws.

"It's too late for that."

"You know you've broken us up, right?"

"I know."

Someone else would have to hold her hand from now on.

Geoff sighed - hollow, empty, drained - and struggled to find the right thing to say.

Their relationship had shattered, just like that, and he couldn't even get her to look him in the eyes.

"Good luck in Hong Kong, Geoff. You'll make your next girlfriend very happy."

"Thank you," he whispered.
This was a writing exercise I found on a forum I'm on.

...I just realized I messed up. Oh well. The prompts are below.

a. One sentence with a wall/boundary.
b. One sentence with a sentence about the weather.
c. One sentence with sound.
d. One sentence with a gesture.
e. Dialogue with 6 words or less.
f. One sentence involving light or lighting.
g. Dialogue with 10 words or more.
h. One sentence involving the ceiling or the floor.
i. One sentence involving texture and/or touching.
j. One sentence involving an object smaller than a hand.
k. One sentence involving an allusion to art or literature
l. One fragmented sentence (a sentence without a main subject and/or verb)
m. One sentence with furniture.
n. Dialogue with a question.
o. Dialogue with another question.
p. One sentence involving hands or fingers.
q. One sentence with a dash (ex. She grabbed her gloves - fingerless and red as her hair - and left.)
r. One sentence with a metaphor.
s. Whispered dialogue.
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0hgravity's avatar
wow, what a strict exercise!

you did very well with it though :)